Comments on: The Priceless Privilege: Part 5 https://bythywords.com/the-priceless-privilege-part-5/ Sun, 18 Jul 2021 08:23:30 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=6.6.5 By: Joel Horst https://bythywords.com/the-priceless-privilege-part-5/#comment-110 Thu, 19 Mar 2020 14:08:26 +0000 https://bythywords.com/?p=1164#comment-110 How SCANDALOUS that Paul and Rosemary would be alone together in a car! Doesn’t the author know what that leads to?

Also, besides the awkward dialogue tags (“replied”, “confided”, “ventured”)—with not one use of the word “said” alone—there’s a big faux pas in this passage. The story is from Rosemary’s point of view. Yet suddenly, we’re told what Paul is thinking—something that Rosemary has no way of knowing. Book seeks editor…

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